appendix Three - "... continue working your way around clockwise adding dots and chapter numbers as notice your responses to play and..." should be as you notice your responses to play ( also "responses to play" sounds awkward - perhaps responses to your playthrough?)
YES, A WINNER!
" Play experiences in the red indicates that you should probably be aware of and steer away from these moments." should be "Play experiences in the red indicate that you should probably be aware of and steer away from these moments" or "Having play experiences in the red indicates that.."
TWO, TWO WINNING ERRORS!