A great read from start to finish! The line to introduce extra trouble is a nice touch given the tight space we are working with. The NPCs are very memorable and tie into the situation nicely. Also, the skill check -> what it provides (Ashen Mill) is a good way to handle a more investigative place or adventure, I would like to see more of that for this system. I am impressed with how much you managed to squeeze in here and tie it together nicely, but it's true the layout suffers a bit. Overall an amazing entry!