Oh the formless chaos void is evoking the Elric story "The Dream of Earl Aubec" ! Lovely writing that supports it!
I love Earnest, and the design for Oriel is very cool (especially the use of detachment, etc).
The only suggestion I might have is it may be useful to explain the twist to the GM at the top of the module.
I would (and might) absolutely run this! Great submission!
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I'm glad you liked it, that was exactly the vibe I was going for.
As for the twist, you're absolutely right. It was a decision made to save space, but it didn't actually serve that purpose because I had to explain it elsewhere, and it would have been clearer the way you suggest. I might make an extended version or something like that after the jam is over.
Thanks for taking the time to read my adventure. If you decide to run it at some point, I'd love to hear how it went.