I am unfamiliar with the Vaults of Vaarn, but I'll try my best to provide useful feedback.
When I looked up "councilor vs counselor" it suggests that councilor is specifically for elected officials and not mental health professionals.
Great use of the word ulfire.
I don't understand the purpose of the decimal digits on the hexes. I assume it's a Vaults of Vaarn thing.
I would love another sentence on the 21st century man's character/state of mind.
This is an extremely inventive and fun adventure. I love the art and the color scheme. The use of water rationing is also great. I have a clear understanding of how to run it and, assuming I knew Vaults of Vaarn, think this would be easy to pick up and play with little additional prep. You did a good job of packing in a lot of content while making it clear, imaginative and visually interesting. Loved the x-ray lantern, Faa nomads, space whale, Autarch clones and gravity well- very cool ideas!
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Haha, dangit. Yeah I had made that note for myself (councilor -> counselor) and I guess just missed implementing the fix. Good catch. The hex coordinate system is just being expressed as X.Y instead of X,Y because I thought it looked more sci-fi. Agreed on the brevity of 21st century digital boy, but alas the space taketh away. Thanks for reading.