Congrats on your first vn! I enjoyed the presentation here, the art is very cute and I think the music was pretty well composed (if a bit short)
The writing was generally alright and I think it has a real standout scene. I played in response to a call for writing feedback, so for comment lurkers I'll be divulging into spoilers, beware!
The scene where Nova takes over Ashley's body was excellent! Losing one's control over themself and being pilotted by an AI in this manner is an incredibly interesting concept and I thought it was a really goddamn good idea, very well done! It conveys the horror quite nicely alongside just being a really incredible concept.
However, I generally felt the story lacked focus. It introduces a lot of ideas but doesn't really evolve them much, and I wish it spent some more time focussing on one idea such as the above and fully developing it rather than lightly touching on many ideas. The LLMs, roller derby, arranged marriage etc. were all mentioned but I feel there wasn't enough commentary or usage of the subjects (in some cases as the roller derby stuff feeling like it kinda disappeared after a point) to justify their inclusion.
I didn't really like the deus ex's of both endings, they felt a little too absurd and I feel the rest of the story didn't build up enough to earn the absurdity of them.
The humour was pretty funny sometimes (the eyes emoji was really funny thank you I giggled very much) but other times I felt it got in the way of pacing (I think the Throngle and devil/angel bits went on a bit too long) though I admit humour is harder to judge as its a matter of personal taste.
I did enjoy the little bits of Nova's perspective we did get! the little sheep scenes, I really enjoyed how they were presented and what they communicated, though I wish we had a little more of them as it feels like Nova develops a bit too much too fast, but I enjoyed those scenes regardless.
I also really liked the opening scene - it's a very strong opening scene that introduces the world well and I thought it was a very fun and gripping idea. I do feel that it paints the doctor to be a much more important character than she ended up being, though.
Overall, I think this brought up some very interesting and compelling ideas, and had some moments of incredibly compelling writing, but felt a bit too spread out and could've benefitted from being cut down into a more focussed and pointed story.
A fun experience overall! Thank you very much for sharing! Excited to see what you guys get up to next :>