Thank you so much for your critique!
Yeah, thus project was very difficult to work through in the span of one tiny month. I had originally planned on Tyler and Aryaman Meeting each other nine times but I thought it wouldve exceeded the word count so I stripped it down to just three. I had also planned for there to be a full Cafe scene and a sex scene but I had to scrap those as I was running out time. The sex scene was particularly sad for me to let go of because after it I wanted Aryaman to ponder about certain things regarding the creation of the Gandharva to Tyler.
Yeah, I can imagine there are a lot of typos. The word processor I opted to use for this project (Ellipsus) does not appear to have a spell checker. And I didn't really have time to do a properly beta read so I opted to rush through it as I add in the animations and such. Just things for me to consider in the future.
The customer scene and the background of Tortilla Ringer were both references to my other VN Nocturne.
I will say though there were multiple times throughout the ordeal of making this I just wanted to quit, especially coming down towards the end. I kept thinking to myself "I can't wait for this damn month to be over" so I'm glad the little jank I managed to put out in the end was at least a little bit enjoyable (I feel you can definitely see the rushed-down-ness coming down towards the end of the VN.
I had originally ended up writing Tyler's and Aryaman's initial meeting into another tirade against AI and, to avoid the airing of grievances thing you had mentioned, I scrapped it.
But all in all, thank you so much for your critique! It means alot