Hello, thank you a lot for leaving your review for my game!
I'm always happy to hear feedback from people.
Cutting vn short was indeed a tough decision, but the one I had to make to fit into the jam's deadline.
ART:
I'm going to redraw all my sprites into more polished versions and give each character at least 2-3 poses to make them impactful.
Writing:
My plan is mostly to polish it as much as I can. I'll use reverse translation, grammar checkers, context reverso, etc., to find spots that may leave some readers confused,
The story:
The story is supposed to go from lighthearted to a darker tone with time.
One of my ideas is also to rewrite several dialogues and add 2-3 scenes in the prologue to define my characters better.
Their friendship dynamic is indeed leaning too much into humor right now.
Shared sense of humor is one of the most common ways for people to connect. At the moment, I thought that it would help readers to believe in their friendship. It wasn't a bad idea at its core, but I leaned too much into it, and now the story lacks elements that would show their differences.
Thank you again for your critique. I'll try my best to learn from it and become better as an author.
Take care!