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Ah, always hard to rate unfinished VNs… This is quite entrancing: the whole package gives it a weird mood that’s really cool. Can’t quite articulate it.

Ren is a really weird but charming character, but of course the scene with Tom recontextualizes it. Also, you managed to make me care about a CEO, that’s impressive.^^

There are a number of little typos and stuff, but it doesn’t detract much. It’s a bit weird that the first time we hear of Lucan’s wife, he calls her Lisa; is that supposed to show he doesn’t even remember her name? I’m really not sure. It’s a bit weird that the VN is called after her too, but it might make sense in the complete version.

As for the theme, the story of the Boy Who Cried Wolf is mentioned and it seems the VN is trying to make parallels, but I don’t see it yet.

Overall, an interesting start for sure, good job!

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Thank you so much for the feedback! And the Lisa/Jane thing that was actually a typo on my part... Her name is supposed to be Jane, so sorry for the confusion and I'll make sure to fix that in the next update.  (Including all the other typos...) 

As for the Boy Who Cried Wolf parallels, they become a lot more important later on in the story. I was aiming for a somewhat diff interpretation of the fable... Hopefully that will make more sense in the completed VN! 

But thank you again for even reading this. I can't tell you how much I appreciate it! 🥹