Thanks for the thoughts. Some of it was just pure sloppiness on my part, being in a hurry to get something out under 1000 words. I could normally do better. Then other things are really good thoughts I appreciate. Good call-outs.
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I think grammar and punctuation are really my strong points, even though it may not show. I am not an expert, but I just didn't spend enough time on it to refine it to where it needed to be. My main areas of wanting to approve is actually writing stories that keep people's interests and flows well overall. I have written stories in the past people like. Maintaining consistency is the hardest part.