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You are certainly not wrong, and I respect your honesty. This is my first published scenario, and I learned a lot in the process, especially when looking at a lot of the other entries. The primary thing being that art and layout aren't make or break, but they certainly count for quite a lot when you've got 2 sides of one page to form an opinion. I'm not an artist, so I went for functional over pretty, and with more time in the oven and maybe a collaborating artist I definitely would have have liked to punch it up a notch and make some deeper thematic connections.

I had some additional ideas for the monofiber's mechanics, as well as navigating the labyrinth, but in the end they were too gimmicky and took up valuable space I needed elsewhere, so I made the decision to cut them.

I appreciate the feedback!

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If this is your first shot at it, then you did great. And no wonder you chose to play it safe. No need to run before you've experimented with walking. I think there are a lot more first-timers who go wrong in the other direction, trying to do the coolest thing ever without learning to do the basics well, and end up with chaotic messes. I look forward to seeing what you come up with next time if you give yourself a bit more leash.