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I—honestly—just cannot—believe—the absolute—glacial—slog of this visual novel. I am sitting—here—staring—at—the screen and it—feels—like the clock is ticking—backwards—because nothing actually happens except for the protagonist—thinking—the same boring—repetitive—redundant thoughts over—and—over—again until my brain—turns—to—mush.Every—single—tiny action is preceded—by—four entire pages of internal—monologue—that serves no purpose other than to re-explain—what—I—just—saw on the screen, but now—with—extra unnecessary—flowery—meaningless thesaurus-bait adjectives. Oh—he's—reaching for a door handle? Let’s spend—ten—minutes reading about the metallic—frigid—steely—chilled—unforgiving surface of the knob and how it—represents—the uncertain—doubtful—precarious—shaky—hesitant nature of his—very—existence.The pace is so sluggish—it—makes a snail look like a jet—engine—and the worst part is the redundancy is—so—thick you could cut it with a dull—blunt—unsharpened—heavy—rust-covered knife. It’s like—the—AI—forgot it already told me he was sad three—sentences—ago, so it has to tell me—again—using five different words for "gloomy" while breaking—up—every—single thought with these infuriating—dashes—that make the text impossible to read at—any—normal speed.I—want—to enjoy the story, but there is—no—story, only the endless—infinite—ceaseless—never-ending—perpetual void of this guy’s internal—rambling—which is just the same idea recycled—rotated—rephrased—and regurgitated until I want to—alt-f4—my entire life.

I had to specify to the AI to write this comment in this particular style for me btw. Why do this for an entire visual novel mate? The animation is pretty good though

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I did acknowledge elsewhere that the em dash usage was overwhelming in the first few chapters, and I did reduce it while keeping some instances in later chapters, since the punctuation serves a purpose. Apparently, you don’t understand what that purpose is, which is why you had to ask AI to write that nonsense post and manufacture a comparison between a specific formatting request and normal usage.

And honestly, you brought up several writing style issues you disliked, all of which were present from the very first few chapters. You kept reading anyway, and now you want to alt+F4 your life. Honestly, maybe you should, because you clearly don’t know when to stop, and here you are crying about it at the finish line. Or maybe those things weren’t actually dealbreakers after all, so why did they take up the bulk of your complaint? Pick a lane and try to be consistent, instead of embarrassing yourself on the internet.