Yeah, if there's anything I'd go back and change about this submission it would have been going into it with a clear melody and going from there. Unfortunately I thought I'd miss the jam period so I kinda just ran through getting three on-brand and high quality tracks out for the sake of participation and fun as opposed to sitting down and scoring 2-4 tracks with evolution and melodic progression.
My plan was to do the worldbuilding and audio quality I always try to do without sacrificing any of that to "force" a melody in there.
The 'A♯, B, F" to "B, F, G♯" (Fdim) stabs starting with the choir felt like a nice build in, everything else (root wise) stays in that realm. Finding something in the net of "A♯, B, C, C♯, D♯, F, G♯" was fun pad and harmonics wise.
I totally feel like your ratings are spot on. I'd probably give myself 2/5 on the melody clarity. Maybe it's just introspective knowledge but I know for a fact there could have been structured melody if I'd cut corners elsewhere.
EDIT: The font got bold because I copy/pasted the chords / scale from a notation app lmaoooo