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Alright I finished it! Well it was interesting.... I have to say it gets long winded and wordy quickly, many scenes feel too long. But the overall plot is interesting. I like hunter, he's so cute!  Roscoe is alright, he is all over the place but there is a reason for that.  


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It is kinda hard to believe everyone keeps giving him another chance when he does something wrong in every scene! Anyway the story climax and final parts are the best. The monster and spirit where cool. The resolution felt fitting and it ended on a hopeful note.

So yeah it was alright in the end.

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Roscoe is a character who was very heavily based on my own experiences in life, and a lot of those second chances felt very miraculous to me indeed. From a narrative perspective, though, that's perfectly valid criticism, and I appreciate your honesty very much!

Regarding the verbosity of it, it's something I admittedly have a tendency to do, but I wrote it the way I wanted to, and I'm happy with it. That in no means devalues your input, though, and should I decide to write another story, I'll keep it in mind as sound advice.

Thank you so very much for taking the time to read the story I worked so hard on for so long. It means the world to me that you were willing to give your precious time to my story. <3

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Ah, I see. 

Yeah, sometimes its easy to write too much when you have a lot of idea!

Anyway I do admire your dedication and hard work on this story.