Ah, I see.
Yeah, sometimes its easy to write too much when you have a lot of idea!
Anyway I do admire your dedication and hard work on this story.
Alright I finished it! Well it was interesting.... I have to say it gets long winded and wordy quickly, many scenes feel too long. But the overall plot is interesting. I like hunter, he's so cute! Roscoe is alright, he is all over the place but there is a reason for that.
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It is kinda hard to believe everyone keeps giving him another chance when he does something wrong in every scene! Anyway the story climax and final parts are the best. The monster and spirit where cool. The resolution felt fitting and it ended on a hopeful note.
So yeah it was alright in the end.
OK, well it sure is neat. But I'm disappointed the city is small, in the video the city is gigantic! Also the controls and a bit buggy, sometimes a key will preform the stated function and sometimes it does not.
I understand its just an experiment, but its a really cool concept.
Last is the city just small or did I do something wrong?
Um, sort of?
Whats in Echo has a lot of the same characteristics, but I'm not sure if its the same thing.
In Adrastea or Khemia (I forgot which) It is mentioned that the Other leaves patches of itself behind when it moves through an area. So the Echo abnormality could be a patch of the Other, but I'm not sure that was intentional by the writers.