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This was a really fun read! I think that Syrol is an interesting main character. Where at first I really just felt bad for her for being constantly thrown, dragged, and knocked out (it's been a really rough few days for her...), she really grew on me as the story went on. I think it was mainly through seeing her take initiative like hiding the second Garba, or crawling into the battlefield to find Jorjun. I gotta respect her determination o7

I think the POV switches near the end really helped to keep the momentum of the story going, and also did a lot to flesh out Jorjun (who I didn't have the greatest first impression of, but like Syrol he grew on me).

The world building is is also very cool, and I'd be interested to see more of this world and these characters! Great story!

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I appreciate your feedback.  And I enjoy seeing the different impressions people have of the characters.  It's been fascinating reading how some people find Syrol endearing while others find her annoying, and the same with Jorjun.  I really wanted all the characters to have multiple layers: focusing on how each one is operating on limited information and pre-set biases.