I know this is a bit of a long comment, but I really love the premise of this game, and it feels real and like it's coming from a place of experience. I'm sure a lot of us COVID people can relate the the feeling of listlessness. I'm excited to see how the game develops.
In the NSFW scene at the beginning it would be nice if the actresses lines were in quotes so it is easier to tell it apart from the rest of the scene. You could also either create more windows with just her speech or have a line break between it and descriptions.
Right as you head outside it would be nice if the description of sunlight hitting my face either had an image to depict it where it is brighter or at least have the next scene be a bit lighter where it doesn't look like it's night time at the abandoned building. It looks like we're going from a dark room, "sunlight" dark streets.
Loving the quantity of image transitions for dialogue. Some seem a bit weird for a first time meeting where she's holding open her jacket for dialogue that doesn't seem to match the vibe. Afterwards when she is doing it to show pride it makes a lot more sense.
When Cynthia says "For what it's worth today didn't feel like wasted time it felt real." To me it feels like it should be the MC saying that to her in that context.
After the altercation it seems like Cynthia is shaken up, says it might be a while, then it seems like they are about to head out that day to explore more, then they talk as if they shouldn't do it that day, yet the day stays the same and we head in just glossing over the "when you're ready" part.
Also when the option to go to the club is presented it isn't clear if MC is going to offer for them both to go there or if he's just going to go there to clear his own head without her.
It seems like some of the dialogue is out of place here because after you get back from exploring and finishing the 17 locations the next scene is preparing to explore tomorrow, end of scene it picks up from after the kiss from 2 scenes ago as if you had just finished the exploration.
The audio matches really well to what is happening in each panel, sometimes switching between each panel out of 3. Felt really immersive. Some of the dialogue felt a little weird and stilted. A little too descriptive for something that is clearly happening in front of the MC. Like Cynthia describes her nipples as both hard and sensitive twice with only 1 line in-between them. The rest just feels more at home in erotica than in semi-natural dialogue. Having some of the "voiced" lines be more internal voice of the MC might keep it more grounded.
Thank you so much for the kind words and detailed feedback, this is exactly the kind of stuff that helps me improve the game!
You've caught a lot of valid issues: the NSFW dialogue formatting, the lighting inconsistency going outside, the mismatched jacket sprite, the "wasted time" line mix-up, the post-altercation day continuity, the club option ambiguity, the scene order bug after the 17 locations, and the NSFW dialogue feeling more written than spoken. Every single one of these is going into the next update.
The note about shifting some of that inner commentary to MC's internal voice especially resonated, I think that'll make those scenes feel a lot more natural. Thanks again for taking the time to write this out! 🙏