Sounds like a very interesting alternate-reality world. I'd love to know in which ways it differs from ours, and what this strange society is like... though it would be nice to see that through a longer story. I'd advise against dropping sudden exposition dumps though, it's always much more pleasing when the information comes naturally, within the regular flow of the story. Also, if you're looking to turn your writing into a profession (or a serious side gig, as it were), I'd advise you to find someone to revise / edit it, as a fresh pair of eyes always helps us catch mistakes we hadn't seen before. But great start!