Hello, I enjoyed the game, esp the ambiguity was exciting <3 Not to mention it is actually finished! :v
Some random stuff that caught my attention while reading:
- "a BURST of pent up passion BURSTs within"
- "silence descends IN the room" (Should be ON or upon)
-"his slow violence is learning to be reigned in with great effort" (This sentence sounds like all its words were put in a bag and shook very hard)
- (Describing Chao's demeanour) "he brings himself" (instead of carries himself)
I'm sure there's more, so the text could use some fixing up!
I'm not saying this to nitpick, but because I know how hard it is to see one's own mistakes and I'd rather take a little time to point them out to you instead of shrugging and moving on...
So yeah, thanks for the cool game! :v
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