Nice submission!
It’s eloquent, succinct, and deeply bleak—seriously, get Amatista some cognitive behavioral therapy! And the artwork was lovely even in its sparsest states.
Best of luck with the remaining chapters and rewrite in Unity! Hopefully that gives you the tools to make this more immersive and engaging. For example, I too noticed how my controller didn’t vibrate with the phone (or bumping into Paula). Or, in a more powerful engine, you might explore more robust environmental sound designs or scene transitions. Be sure to bring over and keep iterating on your number of accessibility settings, and please let us know when you have more progress to share!
It’s difficult to evaluate the story in its unfinished state. I have my own mental health challenges, and everyone experiences that differently. In the first two chapters, I felt trapped inside of somebody who hasn’t yet seen the beauty of life that exists outside of feeling invisible or bullied. I don’t identify with them anymore—it’s exhausting just being there again. Yet, perhaps this is going somewhere more uplifting for them?