Hmm. I think the pitch needs work, as I'm not really sure what the ask is. I also dont really understand whats going on with the $Marvin coin or what the utility is of it. This doesn't mean its not good, but it means I'm unable to vote this very highly because of confusion
I gave you two stars bc i kind of like some of the aspects of what you were saying. I think i even like the idea behind this one "Now, I want to be scrutinized by the ORI as closely as possible and evaluated for my level of trustworthiness" but also it kind of reads like one of those scam messages about needing an "honest and loyal sugarbaby"
tldr adjust the pitch at the minimum to create deliverables. Some good advice Defender gave me during this pitch jam was:
- you might get money for you, and then maybe a really experienced dev shows up and says, this is amazing, I will self fund this by volunteering my time, let's do it
- the resources may show up even if the cash on hand does not
- if you describe how you will allocate it, it is more likely to get allocated
- if you aren't sure how you will allocate it, then just say that/leave it blank/focus on the parts you know you need, to get you to the next step