Thanks a lot. I will put a little more physical stuff in there.
I want to say, the 'original version' is written in German. German language has an "impersonal" form, to keep a little distance between you & others (e.g. in a working-environment). So the Old One uses impersonal form when talking to others & singular when talking of himself. he is also portrayed as male. while the Visitor uses a personal form with others (like you would use with friends or family) & uses plural when talking of itself. It is also referenced as"it", so the German text might give a reader a little more orientation who is talking at which moment.
However, I am very thankful for your feedback & will try to implement it into the next version. Guess I will read your story again & that one by arthim. You guys are masterful at physical description