- Inspiration on point. Love how clearly and concisely you called these out. Easy for me as reader/rater to understand.
- Immaculate vibes.
- Very cool premise.
- Gorgeous art/map/aesthetics.
- Consistent tone.
- Great delivery of exposition (to players) through omen tables, rumors etc.
- "Umbrella Lugosi" got a chuckle out of me.
- Usability: Great.
- Great, escalating (?) random encounter table.
- Excellent formatting throughout. Easy to read, love the monster stats in the side margins (?). Great use of space, easy to use for GMs.
- Interesting use of keywords at the beginning of area descriptions!
- It may be embedded throughout, but I think it would have been nice to get an overview of the adventure at the beginning. I don't think we learn who Malory is until a bit later. We get references to her, via other characters, but she's not listed in the factions section (I know space was probably an issue). I think you're trying to give exposition more organically (which I can appreciate), but I personally would prefer a short section on "here is the definitive version of what happened just before this and what's happening in the dungeon now". As the GM, I don't want to have to piece this together as I'm reading through. Maybe just a personal preference thing.
Great job, dude! I could easily see this entry winning the whole thing. Well done!