Super interesting art style on this one! Found the turn based combat system super interesting with how you have to hit a certain % of notes. It's a bit too easy to just spam all the directions and win that way, and I think the 2nd level was by far the hardest. The 4th level was over in 1 turn since it spams so many notes at you during their turn, but it's only from 1 location so it's not disorienting enough.
I think the biggest flaw is the writing (which you've stated) and then the lack of balancing on the music, one song is SUPER loud and the other SUPER quiet. Just make sure to balance stuff out more evenly at least. For writing, it just feels like a lot of the writing sounds kind of forced and not really like something someone would say in an actual conversation. Just keep writing and you'll get better at it! <3
Super well done though, def one of my favourite games so far in terms of visual identity