Interesting story and I really love the art style! The dialogs and choices are quite robust and filled with references, quite a fun read! I really agree with the other comments that adding music and sounds would really elevate this project.
As for my other comment, I think packaging the game file, .txt and the read-me instructions in the same .zip/.rar would be great for players who want to download and try out your game!
Overall, amazing job! Did a little peak at your deviant art and can't wait to see more!