I like the Shiori portrait! Nice watercolor style coloring!
Clearly you ran out of time to flesh out the rest of the art, but I can see the potential for a unique looking story.
Choosing flash as your engine of choice is, once again, kinda unique. I would suggest giving Renpy a try if you're specifically into making visual novels!
That ending felt too sudden! I need to know what happens later! What are those cards I'm getting from the different dialogue events?
I got 2 different endings... or so I think, because after the dialogue ended the game stopped responding to my key presses.
Some improvement suggestions:
- Add some audio to set the tone of the scenes!
- A clear "Game over" screen with a "retry" option would be welcome.
I would love to see you remake your game in a modern game engine and in a more complete form! As I mentioned above, if you're going for a visual novel, Renpy has everything you need. If you want to mix in something else in your game, you can try Godot and use the Dialogic plugin for the dialogues and multiple option sections.
Good game!