The way you managed to integrate the story and make it feel believable through elements of reality is, to say the least, brilliant! I really liked the concept of the five-second delay in space, and I’d say it was applied excellently throughout the entire context of the scene.
Focusing on silhouettes instead of details was a smart choice—it makes the story more engaging by allowing us to fully focus on it without getting distracted by details that could break immersion. And what can I say about the voice acting? It was fantastic!
Honestly, I have nothing to complain about regarding the scene; everything fit together very well for me. The scene truly has a strong “game introduction” feel, which opens up possibilities for reusing it at some point, if that’s something you’d like to do.
The only point where I might suggest an improvement is the subtitles. While they do their job well, I felt they stray a bit from the overall aesthetic. Perhaps using black text with soft white outlines and a background box with around 50% opacity or less could help them blend better with the rest of the elements.
Overall, though, it was an incredible piece of work. Keep it up, and I wish you the best of luck in the jam!