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some constructive criticism, shall we? :)

the character designs are well-made; points to that. but story-wise, character-wise, and dialogue-wise, it is all lacking and, quite frankly, so mediocre that it turns playing this vn turns into an excruciatingly painful experience. to start off, the protagonist, 'us,' feels like a copy of the stereotypical y/n from those wattpad fanfics — overly emotionally reactive, unnecessarily enthusiastic, and almost...too girly (despite this being a supposedly gender-neutral MC?). it feels like the 'soft, delicate, small, and overly emotionally reactive girl protagonist' that if you yell a little too hard around her, she's gonna flinch out of her skin and start crying. if that's not enough, then comes the whole 'oh yeah i'm rich but i prefer to work a minimum-wage job because i want to feel independent hahaha :p oh and also my parents pay for my apartment and bills!! hehe >c<' bullshit (so much for being independent??)

??? like. when has a rich person EVER done or thought about this? this is just grossly inaccurate/unrealistic, and i can't help but feel there was a much better way to set up the mc's backstory that wasn't.... that. 

all the supporting characters in the game feel not only extremely one-dimensional and overly enthusiastic, but it feels like their sole purpose in the game is to serve / help the MC in some sort of way, rather than play an actual role in the game.

the diologue, -by far, the most excruciatingly painful thing to read here- is OVERWHELMINGLY repetitive. it follows a pattern of "[character says one line of dialogue]" (unnecessary description that brings nothing to the table) "[character says onother line of dialogue]" (another overwhelming and unnecessary description). 

it feels like eating a goddamn nothing-burger. we learn nothing new or useful of the world or its characters, as all the dialogue ever does is state the already obvious. one can get the same point of "feeling nervous and like someone was watching them; mc hurrendly ran to their apartment complex. but even as they made their way to safety and boarded the elevator, that uneasy feeling didn't quite leave them" without needing long and arduous lines that always feel repetitive and serve as nothing but fluff. 

if this game was a restaurant, id still leave starved. (also cue the "it's not just..." being used like 20+ times in the game; c'mon im sure if we put our thinking hats on here, we can come up with better diologue)

overall, although the concept/idea of this vn is unique and seems interesting, its poor execution takes everything away from it. can we please stop glazing this game just because it has a few hot characters and actually criticize it more constructively? that's all anyways 

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I love your criticism! I was wondering if you had any visual novel recommendations that would fit on what’s lacking in this one?

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don't know what vns you've played, but i'll recommend you some of my favorites where i've really come to enjoy not only the characters but plot as well! hope you do end up checking out some :3

To Eat a God by Soffis_mbm ! it's my fav vn novel because it goes beyond just a romance game; the concept is spectacular, all the characters and their designs are unique, and the WORLDBUILDING simply pulls you in. it's a biggie but has lots of dif routes to explore ! :D i especially hope you give this one a play! <3

Watch the Road (DEMO) by mirawakestudios is a great one too. here, the writing and atmosphere really shine through, and if i had to describe it very briefly, it would be 'the nostalgia and melancholy we feel on cold, snowy nights. wouldn't you like to have a deep, long conversation with a stranger and spill your guts?' it's a really lovely (almost poetic) work in progress with lots of alternative endings too, so def worth a check out :3 !

The Winter Wedding by devilinlovegames has been a recent fav of mine - i've personally never seen the concept of the omegaverse used in a vn before so it really drew me in. it has mystery and horror elements with it and is set in a victorian gothic era so it's a very interesting work to check out! 

this one isn't a romance vn, but i'll just add it here because it's a masterpiece on its own: Do NOT Take This Cat Home by Pixeliminal. it's about taking (or not) a seemingly cute cat home. mixes cuteness with horror elements very well; the original music has similar vibes to weirdcore / liminal spaces AND has a very thoughtful and almost unexpected deep message at the end. 

would geniously love to hear what u think if u ever decide to check any of these out! anyways happy playing Dore :D