Wow, certainly a pretty cool vn, I enjoyed it till the end. As for your translation, it’s pretty good! I really felt and saw the dedication of really wanting to share this one to the world. Also I love the chapter/volume designations. For the creator, dang really cool pixel arts on this one, which, by no means of comparing or anything, it reminds me of another creator in mind I also have been playing a number. As for storywise, I can say it’s mostly straightforward, but also like has lil’ light/middle deep when it comes to lore/worldbuilding. I also enjoyed the characters. All of them are really pitiable to summarize and with little to no spoilers. Overall, again, I enjoyed it.
(also very cute art of nanase on that one devlog.)