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Yes, it's time for "hmmmm maybe a mistake, maybe not"! Latest version, when you check on Ina, there's a line of "too honest with the other" and I'm wondering if it should be "each other" instead of "the other", it makes a bit more sense (at least to me). Not wrong per se, just one of those things where I'm used to A instead of the B that is written.

And seeing a mighty Archangel headpatting a doggo girl and wondering who enjoyed that more is one reason why Metatron is required when you visit the area! Seriously, there should be a "see who can do the best job giving Maya a headpat!"

Cryswar35 days ago

how the fuck has it been over two weeks

I'm sorry, I lost track of time horribly

In the Ina scene, this is what it looks like right now, idk if I changed it at some point or not?

"They just seem too honest with each other - too willing to mess with the other, too comfortable in the certainty of their bond. He feels more like her uncle, or even dad. Shark dad? That's a hell of an idea."

Metatron is actually getting a lot of fancy stuff this update, but no content with Maya... yet, at least, lol. I love maya headpat jokes. She's a good(ish) girl who deserves better than life gave her. As she gets to interact with more characters, I'll see who else feels like they would give her headpats or ear rubs!

musical7435 days ago(+1)

I'm not worried, I just assumed you were busy with stuff, between Divine Dawn plus Christmas stuff! I know you'll respond, it just might take a little time.

I just feel "each other" sounds better than "the other", BUT that's a personal thing. I might be the only one who feels that way, it's just an observation :)

We need another spot where Maya decides to demand headpats, like she still wants to feel valued or something, with someone that you wouldn't normally pair her with, like Sarah, or Siofra.

Something else you might think about, given when I woke up today... MC sleeps waaaaaay late and is woken up by whoever has the highest affection cuddling him. When asked why whoever it was didn't wake him up, the response would be "you just looked so cute sleeping there!" (I woke up at close to 1 PM today, not sure WHY I woke up so late outside of "results of the week caught up with me)

Cryswar17 days ago

It was certainly an interesting christmas and new years, lol.

I like the idea, I'll have to think about how to pass Maya around (in a wholesome way). There's a lot of people who wouldn't mind floofing her, but no catgirl to bounce her off of... unless Celica becomes one somehow, lol, she's already basically a cat personality-wise.

Waking up to a cute girl doesn't sound bad! The scene I'm writing tonight actually has something loosely similar, but.... not as happy of a scene overall lol. Man had a rough night. Your idea sounds much cuter and great for a smaller, more wholesome scene! Maybe waking up events? idk.

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