This was a very interesting premise so far, but definitely needs another read-over or two for the grammatical errors I encountered. Some sentences make little sense and some sentence structures get used wrong - which happens to the best of us.
Definitely not to the point of not recommending this however, it's an incredibly interesting world. Gritty, dirty, more than a little deranged -- looking at you Maud. So far Having only met Ace, I can already tell this character will be my downfall, the realistic hopeful to my pessimistic cynic. It will be grand.
[Incredibly excited for future updates because I WILL be following this like a hawk]
Thank you so much for this, I really appreciate both the feedback and the enthusiasm 🖤
My plan is to go back and do a proper read-through once I’ve fully updated Chapter 1, and fix the grammar issues then. At some point I’ll probably also need beta readers, because this project is getting… big 😅
English isn’t my first language, and when I write at like 3 a.m. my brain absolutely goes feral, so yeah things slip through. But cleaning up the grammar is definitely one of my top goals.
I’m really glad you’re enjoying the world and the characters so far and I’m very happy Ace is already your downfall 😌
Glad my comment didn't discourage you, because I have been thinking about this every other day. The writing definitely feels unique and I truly hope you manage to bring your particular flair to the rest of what you want to write :)
As a fellow non-native english speaker, I get it. Sometimes words simply don't look right even when they are.