I can say this expand beautifully, there is still something to be improved like mistake of pronouns and some typo but dang so far I'm pumped to see how others go after time skip in chamber.
If the previous version is good, this one is awesome, you really expand it, giving details to the scene now MC's background is more clearer, they're Prince/Princess of Heavenly Empire, previously I only get the impression that MC in previous version is heir to the great cultivator house in immortal realm, now I am getting chills on how influential their original family is, the forest scene also expanded, I like the addition of mundane things like handfishing I mean we're playing child here even if they're crazy powerful child there should be time for play and fun things. Not just cultivating and being serious all the time.
I like that you also expand more on Ji Jian now she doesn't feel like in previous version forgettable extra character, now I have reason to pick Ji Ji as my first word instead of Ru Ru beside trying to tease Ruolan, I think having a chance to develop bonds with foster family is great addition to this story.
I think the pacing still good, you manage to balance the expansion from being too lore dumpy but still pretty descriptive.
Since you introduce slavery how about getting sub plot going there, visit slave market maybe play some moral choice there, buy one, uplift them, buy one be cruel to them, or not interested at all, we have something like underground fighting ring and somewhat auction of relic and artifacts, it seems like missing opportunity for not introducing slave auction or market, I mean we only get one chance to do this during Sanziyan hunt, if we choose to teach those cultivator a lesson we can get a slave.
It seems like missed opportunity, the concept is there but not further explored, what's the scale of this slavery, how one can be come slave, how to buy freedom if such concept exists, so far MC only view the world from elite point of view, the lowest of MC's friend probably Li Hua since he is from merchant family, so far MC only meet couple characters that can be categorized as downtrodden.
not sure about song mao since he is not telling his past in detail just yet, Lu Yan despite being treated harshly by her family still among the elite group.