All I can say is that I loved this. It's a beautiful mix of sarcasm and heartbreak and love all tied up into a perfect little package, with insanely good presentation to boot. I have no notes. Keep making things.
Thank you so much for your kind words! This was my first time joining a jam (and sharing my work publicly), so knowing that people connected with it is incredibly rewarding. And weird. But like, good weird! :D