Really great submission!
My one real problem with it (and thing i’ll have to figure out when I inevitably run this) is Sarah. on the smaller side i’m not huge on child endangerment, but that i can get past… what I have real trouble with is why on earth she is here? I get that the Trillionaire doesn’t care, sure, I get that she is needed as a “Key” to the too small vent puzzle, I get that she ramps up tension because there is a child present… but in what world are we doing an experimental testflight and we have the Trillionaire and his Daughter on board… I can sorta get there for Gil Reed himself (classic Elon style nonsense) but it just feels like one step to far for me.
This makes it sound like i didn’t like the module, quite the contrary I think the module is great, which is why this one point that I see as a flaw sticks out so much to me…
A really strong contender! Can’t wait to see what you write next!