Oh that was very unexpected xD Words of advice! Make the starting area look better.. A kids classroom, a open field, anything but what you have! It looks like a barely worked on prototype but then suddenly you hit the proper meat of the game and it looks really well done. You really need to show people your best quickly rather than the worst or they might get turned off sadly :/
But it was really good, you should be happy with your work :) (Just make that intro section look nicer!!!!)