You made a post about the English translation so I tried to be on the lookout for anything related to that. Overall I think it was really well done!
There were a few instances where you used a word that wasn't technically wrong but didn't really fit with the context of the scene/the tone of the story or the characters relationship, but it was nothing too serious. As an example... The use of console so much was a a bit odd since I think most people would just refer to it by the consoles name not as 'the console'
I found a few lines that were not translated. The route I took to find it was 1. Call the police 2. Don't say anything Its a line Maya says once entering the ramen shop.
After I equipped the flash light, the text was not translated. It also then said "I taking flashlight with me" which is not grammatically correct, it should say "I took the flashlight with me"
A line while Maya got stuck in the vent was not translated.
A great opening scene, I loved hearing the character go on about ramen in such specific detail only for it to pan over to Yan, completely dissatisfied with the ramen lol
The art is really good! I really love the designs for the two main characters a lot, especially Maya. I also did genuinely jump when I saw that eye in my ramen, that scene was done very well.
Loved the story, it was a very creepy and fun visual novel to read through. I got a dead end my first try. I liked the little ending card. Good job! :)