Aww I'm sad that we only got a little bit of this ! I'm honestly impressed with the number of CGs in there, they were all very nicely composed, I liked how unafraid you are to use different angles in an interesting way, plus the lighting was quite nice. I'm quite fond of the character models, somehow the juxtaposition of the blocky elements and the more round/smooth body parts isn't jarring.
The writing could use a little work as it repeated itself a bit much to my taste, but it's hard to judge overall without seeing the complete story ! An interesting start for sure ( ´ ▽ ` )b