Hey, I'm really glad that you had a good time, Accents are a bit of a weird thing to handle when it comes to writing, mostly because I didn't add any special accent in the way the text is, even though Vanessa as a very light touch of scottish accent, Elise's to British, and Himia to something a bit similar to norwegian.
Still I picked something that was visually readable to something that could've been confusing.
As for the grammar issues, yah it's a mess I've got to take a good day and take care of all of them honestly !