Ah, transphobic daytrading landlords. I suppose it's only fitting that Florence felt it within her rights to start taking advantage of Michelle, considering all of the other exploitation she's already doing...
What we have here in this VN is a failure to communicate~ It was truly unfortunate, seeing Michelle stuck in such a bad situation, yet feeling completely unable to tell anyone else about what was happening, even the people she's purportedly the closest to. For that matter, I was shocked at just how far she was willing to stretch her lies, rather than sharing even a censored or watered-down version of the truth~
I also enjoyed seeing how Florence and Michelle began to warm up to each other as the story progressed, but that aspect of their affair would've been stronger (or perhaps stung more sharply), I feel, if more time had been spent fleshing out the relationship between Michelle and Krysten beforehand. As it is, the bulk of the interactions we see between the two girlfriends amounts to little more than Michelle denying her advances or concocting some lie or another to appease her. And while that's all sensible and consistent with the events of the story, imagine how much harder it'd hit if, earlier on, we see how close and intimate the two of them are; but then, the sexual exploitation first makes Michelle withdraw into herself, and then grow actively cold and dismissive towards Krysten as she becomes more attached to Florence... or something to that effect, heheheh~
In any case, very nice work! I'll be looking forward to reading the final release, especially once all three parts are finished~