First, you should add the soundcloud link to the description here. It'll help people find it much easier.
Second, this track is incredibly loud and (I mean this in a professional way) a little hard to listen to. Every instrument seems individually compressed and it created a very strong saturation. It's not really a bad piece of music, but there's so many clashing frequencies and in some segments the dissonance is seemingly more unintentional than inspired.
I'd love to hear how this sounds with a proper mix though, it's not bad at all.
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i made it rushed and the jam was about 7 minutes to end when i posted, so i didn't had time to put the soundcloud link.
About the volumes, also didn't made much, but i feel that i can make it sound a bit more pleasing to hear, so i will upload a more mixed version on soundcloud and maybe on youtube as well.