I liked the syncopation, it's a good trick to make a track special. Hmm... What headphones do you use? I have full-size ones, but they're low quality. I can hear all frequencies well. But I agree that the low frequency equalization could be improved, the instruments overlap each other.
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It's definitely a good technique, and it sounds good in your work. The only thing that knocked me down was the moment at 0:07 seconds when the snare drum became noticeably louder.
I listened to the beyerdynamic dt 770 pro, but after listening to the Adam T7 monitors, I want to note the wide stereo picture. However, I really can't get rid of the feeling of hum in the mix. Maybe I'm just a fan of the drier sound and just don't understand the genre.