The idea at the very beginning can quite be implemented in a good hip-hop beat
-In the work most of all the moment with uncontrollable low (In the low-frequency spectrum plays 2 different instruments, and even different notes - this causes discomfort)
-Most of all in this work I liked the bass (It is very elastic and with character), however in pure form it can be listened to only a couple of seconds. I would like to hear with this bass and harmony a real hip-hop beat.
In any case a good start