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Great story. One of the best I have read in this jam. For me personally, I would have liked it if you hadn't repeated the "close enough" at the end. You had the perfect setup and payoff without needing to specifically say it. It's a small gripe in an otherwise fantastic submission. Great work.

Thanks for the kind words. And I agree with the gripe, I found it such a tough balancing act between laying on the theme too thickly and making it too subtle so as to feel underdone or a throw-away line.

I completely agree with you - it's hard to balance. I didn't make one mention of the phrase 'close enough' and I think some people couldn't see it. I felt the same way as Keith but it's a two day jam and an audience you're not too sure about, so I didn't penalise it. Top job, mate!