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Great story! You gave some real thought to the infected and I really enjoyed the description of how the infection chose what to change in each host. It's a very clever way to move the infected away from being mindless husks and towards entities with real character. And the ending was superb. Love it. 

More than any other entry I've read, I think this story really would have benefited from a two thousand word limit! I thought the groundwork for your main character was excellent and made me empathise with him (not an easy feat for a character who is just a skeleton). It left me wanting to read more.

The characters are great in this story and you managed to tug at the heart strings in the final lines. Really well done. And I liked your approach to the theme, I thought it was cleverly done--clear without being explicit.

That was a great read! I liked how the story and setting felt uniquely OPR despite the small word count.

Mate, I love soul-snatchers/GSC and I enjoyed your spin on them--doing everything out in the open with the blessing of their ignorant rulers. It's quite a clever take. The story was great, solid pacing and a nice twist. Really well done!

Thanks for the kind words. And I agree with the gripe, I found it such a tough balancing act between laying on the theme too thickly and making it too subtle so as to feel underdone or a throw-away line.

You write great action. Great flow and clear visuals. I really liked this entry.

This is definitely one of the most original concepts I've read in this jam. Nicely done. I found the professor's focus on hats quite endearing. 

I think this entry may have edged its way into my top 5. A couple of cosmetic formatting issues aside, this is a superb bit of grimdark fiction. Best of all, it felt distinctly OPR which was great.

You managed to cram a whole lot of grimdark tone into this story. Well done! I really like stories about the average guys in universes filled with hyper-advanced robots and aliens.

You wove the theme into this one really well. One of the best executions I've read in this jam.

I really liked your character development. Her reason for returning to the house at the end showed so much of her character in that simple action. 

Thanks! And you'd better believe that I'm stealing the term Chekhov's Donkey.

This is some solid grimdark flash fiction. Layering the theme and the payoff was really well done.

I liked this story an how neatly you got the theme in there. It reminded me of old White Dwarf fiction, so it gets a nostalgic thumbs up from me.

Great style and fantastic execution. Congrats on writing an absolute gem.

I could visualise the setting of this story better than any other I've read so far. The character motivation was solid and you wove the theme in well at the end. Nice job!

This is solid grimdark fiction. I would read more of it if I could.

This is such a great Grimdark slice-of-life story. The characters are really well formed for such a short piece and I'm a sucker for goblins in stories. Great job.

I was stoked to see this in my queue and it didn't disappoint. I'm a sucker for goblins and you nailed their energy perfectly. Plus you absolutely stuck the landing on this jam's theme.

This one was fun and has the bones of a great narrative campaign. 

The depth of character that you were able to squeeze into this story--from the setting to the ship itself--was excellent. I really enjoyed this one. 

I think this is a great example of leaving space in the story for the reader to fill in the gaps. It reminded me of the System Shock 2 style of narrative, so it gets a big thumbs up from me.

I really liked this one, you pulled off light-hearted and funny very well. Great use of formatting to keep the story clear and flowing. The last line got a chuckle out of me.