That's fair. What I am talking about goes beyond simple copy editing. This is where beta readers come in handy. Having another set of eyes go over the whole thing and tell you where the problem spots are.
That part in the dungeon I was pretty ok with. I did notice the out, and thank you for that. Playing with the imps sounded fun though, and I did actually enjoy it. It was only after that I went "hey, wait a minute..." Just want to be clear that I choose it myself, and in no way did it fee 'forced'. I also realize this is erotica and in no way a reflection on real life. I just happen to enjoy things more when it's consensual. I also appreciate the desire to tell a simple, compact story. This was just a case of enjoying something so much that you want more of it. While it's true that most audiences for this game just want to get to the good stuff; there is still room to sprinkle in little hints of story here and there. Not saying you need to go for a huge infodump. Much better to spread things out over several plot lines. Even if you decide to leave things as they are, it was still a lot of fun. I am sure you have learned just from making this. And thank you for being so polite in listening to me. Wanting to see what the new project will be.
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