I like how you presented this module. It has a vintage 1950s science fantasy feel to me, which is neat. The only choice I don’t think you should have made is the orange background to the text boxes, it made your text harder to read. All in all though, good job.
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Thanks for your feedback. I agree with the choice of orange not being the best. It was a limitation on the brush pens I had available. Wanting to do it by hand made changing color difficult, since there wasnt really any other colors to chose from. I had tried out orange on a separate paper and it look ok. But once I actually started coloring in the textboxes and I saw the first one I wasnt all happy with it. I was left with the choice of having different colors (could have tried another) or just run with my choice. If I do another one, I'll expand my brush pens and chose another color.
Happy that the vintage feel came across. I was aiming for some old school classic fantasy feel.
Do another, don't stop now! Have a crack at this, I think it'll fit neatly into your new world! https://itch.io/jam/build-a-better-world-ttrpg-jam