Delightful! I liked all the characters (especially Tem, I am very easily won over by pretty women wielding weapons) and I liked the mystery! The setup with the various body parts acting as sensory witnesses postmortem is a stroke of brilliance. How does anyone construct a good murder mystery within a week with such original ideas?? It would have been nice to have some indicator for which parts of a scene could be investigated, but it worked well enough for the jam. The last piece of evidence you present and the ending was a really clever mechanical twist on the Ace Attorney formula. Though, the ending was really quite abrupt. That final scene is desperately wanting for John’s thoughts, and/or Tem and Luna’s conversation, after the verdict. Otherwise I think the story progressed reasonably well.
It does feel as though some aspects of the mystery were rushed. The autopsy doesn’t actually directly state the cause of death. There appears to be a child in the photo of John and Tem that goes completely unmentioned. It feels that nobody remarks on how John’s ring was at Luna’s place but John himself on the night of his death hadn’t entered. Did Tem notice he wasn’t wearing it their last fight?
This is minor, but I didn’t understand how UMI Court actually worked. What does it mean to sentence someone to damnation? I suppose the sentencing only take affect when that person dies? How can The Judge allow a limbic to indict a party that isn’t even present and that the limbic can’t even directly identify? What do Tem and Luna think is going on? Why do they immediately understand what’s happening? I suppose it comes with “system access”? Why don’t they try to explain to John his situation but instead let him flounder about so much?
Overall, quite the impressive entry.