Thanks for the review! We'll be doing a definitive version in the future once we're done with Snow's rest.
I really appreciate the compliments to the artist, he more than deserves the praise, his work elevates the quality of the VN to a higher level. As for the writing, I do agree with you. I'm still discovering my writing style, honestly even my grammar can use some work and Bon is a miracle worker when it comes to that as well. The game jam also added more pressure to write quickly and with my poor habit to procrastinate until deadlines, I rushed most of it during the last week and we didn't really have time to edit.
Then we missed the deadline by a few minutes. which was a major morale blow, we also had work to do with our other VN which we'd been neglecting, so we decided to polish the rougher edges of RitC at the time and publish it so we can get it off our minds momentarily and return to it with a fresher mindset once we finish SR.
We'll take note of your criticisms and try our best to deliver an even better story in the future! <3
- Thamer
PS, If you'd like to point out more examples of where you felt the writing was lacking it would be greatly appreciated.