I always was bad at all this family terms like sibling, cousine etc. I will rewrite this part to represent situation better.
About Envy, my game will not have any "trully forced" or cheating content, because I am myself not fan of such things. But, Envy have some powers, not told yet. And main character with Lust will have some powers, almost obvious which. So SOMETHING "not real" or with fake feelings/bodies can be.
Okay, just tried the new version and interesting how you change that introduction dialogue.
However, I would like to point out something else I have noticed about it:
Second person and first person pronounces are mixed.
For example, in:
He’d probably waited a long time for this day, to stop being limited by us. But you never resented him.
Here in that context:
So, either the “us” should be “you both”, or “you” should be I.
Also:
Wooooow… He’s so huge…
Shouldn’t it be “It” instead of “He” given that this sentence refers to the mall?
