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OK, You are right. I think I didn't explain myself very well when it comes to the incest trope.  I don't hate it, and I know it isn't going anywhere. I'm just tired of it, even though I have loved some AVNs that use it. I wrote my review in REVIEWS a little differently.  I gave it 2 stars, but hope that I can change that later if this gets fixed. My Rating Review:

An AVN needs three things to be great:
1. An Amazing Story
2. Outstanding Dialogue
3. Fantastic Visuals

I gave the what I believe to be a fair shake, and couldn't finish it. Part of it has to do with my hang ups with the incest trope. I just feel it's been done to death. And changing the terms of mom to landlady, or sister to room mate is just dumb in my honest opinion.

That being said, I have read some amazing AVNs that used that trope and loved them (Sisterly Lust, Depth's Revival) and feel this isn't a reason alone to not like an AVN. So let me tell you what I think of this one.

1st, the Visuals are fucking epic. The renders, the animations, the models used, are all simply incredible. Visually, this is a stunning work.

2nd, the Story is an amazing concept. MC is trying to balance having the abilities from two goddesses while trying to keep the peace with both, and having to deal with a fairly chaotic home life as well. There is a lot of great stuff in this story arch and I can see a possible longevity to this work if some things get fixed.

3rd, the dialogue. Here is where this piece loses me. First off let's start with the fact that this was translated from something else to English, and there are a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. That itself is kind of normal. But there are obviously manners of speech in the original language that don't translate very well to the English version, making it hard to understand what characters are saying, or trying to say in their conversations. ALSO NOT UNUSUAL. This is normal in a lot of AVNs. A skilled AVN reader can look past these things and move on. I usually try to.

BUT, and here is where it all goes off the rails, It's obvious the author started with using the incest trope, and somewhere along the way, decided to not use it. So all throughout the dialogue there are elements of both mixed together. They start out with MC not being related to the house mates, and none of them being related to each other. Except you can see the two girls are obviously twins, and look like their NOT mother. They continually talk about having sex with each other being some kind of taboo. And in some parts even use the words mom, and sister. This story has no idea how it wants to present itself. I got pretty far into the story before I couldn't take it anymore.  What this story needs is a complete dialogue rewrite by a native English speaker. It needs to identify what the characters are to each other, and redo the parts where them hooking up either does or does not make sense. The base elements are there to make this a really great work of art. But as is, I think it is not worth the time to try to understand it. I hope the author is able to take criticism in the spirit it's given. I think this could be amazing, if it gets fixed.