OK, I am now many many hours into this. I gave it a fair trial. Here's my thoughts.
First, to make a great AVN you need 3 things. The visuals have to be amazing, the story has to be incredible, and the dialogue has to be on point. If any one of these is off, the AVN could very well suck. I have read through probably 150 AVN's at this point. So I think I can recognize a decent one.
The visuals in MBD are simply unbelievable. The stills and the animations both are stunning. I don't think I can give a high enough rating to the visuals. They are among the best I've ever seen.
The dialogue, as I mentioned previously, needs a lot of work. Not only is there a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, but a lot of the story is ruined by the author's inability to set a standard for the story and follow it. In the beginning, they establish that Molly owns a house and everyone else just lives there, they aren't related. But the two girls are twins, but not sisters, but are? And Molly isn't Mom, but they sometimes call her Mom? And the word neighbor is used in place of brother or sister throughout the story to make sure the reader knows they aren't related. But they act exactly like they are related, and it's taboo to have sex with each other. BTW, instead of neighbor, the author should use the word roommate, at least in the English translation. So this is either an AVN where its another guy fucking Mom and sisters trope, or it isn't. And the dialogue is very bad at explaining that.
Which leads me to the story itself. Overall, I like the concept of the story. Two goddesses vying for control of a mortal to further their existence while the MC has to deal with shit of his own. Kind of fun. But the telling of the story through the dialogue is NOT working. The arch is great, the execution isn't. Most of the people don't talk to each other they way they should at all for most of the situations they are in. The writing feels very elementary. I would be surprised if the author is older than 25. Don't get me wrong. there are a lot of amazing elements in this story, but the telling of it is not well executed. I made it as far as the conversation with Molly right after MC hooked up with Annie. At this point I had to nope out of it. Why would what they are doing be taboo if no one is actually related? If they aren't related, why do they all act like they are?
To sum up, Visuals = Fucking Incredible. Story = Not terrible, needs more thought put into it. Dialogue = Translation isn't bad, but everything about the grammar is, and it's clear the author doesn't have an understanding how to write for English speaking personalities. Using the Guy fucks Mom and Sisters trope is terrible, lazy, and way overdone. This is not meant to be an insult. It is an honest review, and I hope the author learns from it, and can make the corrections needed to make this a great project. The basics are there, it just needs to be cleaned up, and rewritten in a few spots. It has potential for a great AVN. I just think these things need to be corrected before the story goes any further.
I agree with every last thing you said, other than the trope issues you have with the game. I think that the whole "taboo incest fetish" thing isnt going anywhere. It is still a hugely popular fetish and i think many devs and authors should continue implementing it. Not all porn game fetishes need to be brand new, unique and innovative. In fact, I find it better when the fetishes are widespread, but remain the same tags they've always been. Personally I find the whole "roommates/landlord" thing annoying af. Either have the balls to go with what you meant for it to be, or create a completely different scenario. (Although I understand why these days with Itchio cracking down on some fetishes like that due to retarded legal bullshit...)
You ARE right, however when it comes to flow, context and consistency... The author needs to clean that up, as it was obviously meant to be a taboo incest game, but they cleaned it up (horribly) for some reason. As far as the grammar, they should get someone that can translate (if thats what they did) into english much much better. Or at least write the language fluently and eloquently instead of making it sound like a third grader wrote this.
But other than that, I completely agree with everything else. And I also quite enjoyed the game. This site definitely has much worse out there...
Upvote for the great well-thought out review. ^_^
OK, You are right. I think I didn't explain myself very well when it comes to the incest trope. I don't hate it, and I know it isn't going anywhere. I'm just tired of it, even though I have loved some AVNs that use it. I wrote my review in REVIEWS a little differently. I gave it 2 stars, but hope that I can change that later if this gets fixed. My Rating Review:
An AVN needs three things to be great:
1. An Amazing Story
2. Outstanding Dialogue
3. Fantastic Visuals
I gave the what I believe to be a fair shake, and couldn't finish it. Part of it has to do with my hang ups with the incest trope. I just feel it's been done to death. And changing the terms of mom to landlady, or sister to room mate is just dumb in my honest opinion.
That being said, I have read some amazing AVNs that used that trope and loved them (Sisterly Lust, Depth's Revival) and feel this isn't a reason alone to not like an AVN. So let me tell you what I think of this one.
1st, the Visuals are fucking epic. The renders, the animations, the models used, are all simply incredible. Visually, this is a stunning work.
2nd, the Story is an amazing concept. MC is trying to balance having the abilities from two goddesses while trying to keep the peace with both, and having to deal with a fairly chaotic home life as well. There is a lot of great stuff in this story arch and I can see a possible longevity to this work if some things get fixed.
3rd, the dialogue. Here is where this piece loses me. First off let's start with the fact that this was translated from something else to English, and there are a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. That itself is kind of normal. But there are obviously manners of speech in the original language that don't translate very well to the English version, making it hard to understand what characters are saying, or trying to say in their conversations. ALSO NOT UNUSUAL. This is normal in a lot of AVNs. A skilled AVN reader can look past these things and move on. I usually try to.
BUT, and here is where it all goes off the rails, It's obvious the author started with using the incest trope, and somewhere along the way, decided to not use it. So all throughout the dialogue there are elements of both mixed together. They start out with MC not being related to the house mates, and none of them being related to each other. Except you can see the two girls are obviously twins, and look like their NOT mother. They continually talk about having sex with each other being some kind of taboo. And in some parts even use the words mom, and sister. This story has no idea how it wants to present itself. I got pretty far into the story before I couldn't take it anymore.
What this story needs is a complete dialogue rewrite by a native English speaker. It needs to identify what the characters are to each other, and redo the parts where them hooking up either does or does not make sense.
The base elements are there to make this a really great work of art. But as is, I think it is not worth the time to try to understand it. I hope the author is able to take criticism in the spirit it's given. I think this could be amazing, if it gets fixed.